Need advice on my artwork

[Spazz]

Hey folks... I have been designing a alot lately and I am stuck on what else to do with these 2 pictures.





As you can probably tell the two designs are close to the same fundamentals and concept... however, I feel that they are lacking in something. I want to have them remain black and white because that is the style im going for. They dont have a purpose as of yet... they are just meant to look cool. Any advice and/or feedback would be awesome.

[Intensity]

Re: Need advice on my artwork

Wow those are badass. Very nice.

You teasing bastard, what about our Taru SAM/BLM?????

[Spazz]

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I am finishing up the storyline for ShadowMage... it just takes awhile. I keep running into deadends. I do not want it to be done promptly or half fast... everything I do is either all the way 100% or not at all. So... on that note, I'm sorry for the delay. As for the comments on my art, thanks alot ^_^

[PotentPotables]

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What your artwork is lacking is a focal point.

The top one:
It bring everything together on it's own, and would be a great stand-alone piece, except that it brings everything together on itself without any kind of focus. I would recommend color, but if you need to stay monochromatic, then give some darker highlites. Use the full range of hues on that one.

The bottom one:
Lacks substance. It's not a good stand-alone piece, but would make a really good backdrop for something in the foreground. That one doesn't need any color and could probably be brighter depending on what you would put in front of it.

Aside from my constructive criticism, both drawings are very good. Effort and talent definately went into both and I would like to see more. You should actually put a book together and hit up some local Tatt-shops with more of that kind of stuff.

[Taskmage]

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I'm not sure precisely what you're trying to accomplish with those designs, but I would say what's missing is depth or perspective. For instance, on your top image each wing seems to be layered on top of one another, but they don't cast shadows on eachother and they're all the exact same size, which puts them on the same plane visually and makes it look very flat. If you varied their size to make the back ones recede into the distance a little and did a little more shading, I think that might look better.

[TheGrandMom]

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Well I think that a contrast of some chroming or metallic shading and adding a hint of color to only a part to make the other parts stand out woudl help. I'm no artist but nothing pops out at me. They look like good sketches but they don't look like finished pieces.