The Very Final Fantasy Of Hers

[Lovy]

...Well...
Just wanted to post the thing I've written under influence of this game. I'm creating new thread (moderators, forgive me!), because the mood of this one is totally different from previous, even the main topic is actually the same. I'd like you all to see it.

The Very Final Fantasy Of Hers

She's silently lying and watching the ceiling.
The window is not attracting her eyes.
She's totally captured by this awful feeling-
Doc said if she hangs on two weeks it's surprise...

She cannot go out to look at the faces...
Her beautiful wavy hairs had gone
The last stage of cancer- the truth what she faces.
It's raining... no power, no will to live on...

Next day parents bought her a computer game,
It's called Final Fantasy and the result-
She found new friends there, she's getting her fame!
No pitiful gazes, no hurt, no insult.

She's always so happily communicating,
She finds things to do and to cheer up the party.
She is good in fighting and getting high rating,
And she never thought there will be day of parting...

He shouted- the words had appeared on her screen:
"Why are you not hitting, oh God, you have died!
It is the damn slowest reaction I've seen!"
When he understood what had happened- he cried...

And mouse was still held by soft girlie's hand...
And phrase isn't finished, unsent in chat line...
The ninth week was over and that was her end...
In chat she had written: "This game's so divine..."

[Omniblast]

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how... saddening... good poem...

[Macht]

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I had a friend I met in a MUD I would go to that this poem reminded me of. She was very ill also and suddenly she had stopped showing up, about a month passed and that's when her friend showed up asked her if everything was still alright and heard she was basically on her death bed.

Didn't believe it at first till I saw it, man that was such a sad day. I still have all her letters and photos she sent me, she was a dear friend amazingly 7 years later the sent of the perfume she put on her letters is still on them. Its strange too how when you recall such close friends and your brain tricks your senses and you could swear that scent is all over the place around you.

[Gorgan]

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Nice art it !..! ^_^ !..!/rocks!

[Narwe]

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Lovy, this is so sad. Is this a true story? If so, I'm sorry for your loss.

[Keyura]

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wow, that was amazing. very touching and emotional and very sad too, major major props for a wonderful poetic justice to the joy FFXI can bring

[Gorgan]

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[Kailo]

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That's a great poem Lovy. Despite it's sadness, I really enjoyed reading it. Truly moving.

[DieselBoy09]

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Why did someone post Postal Service lyrics?

[Gorgan]

Chocobo music

This is funny so watch it . go to http://www.flashplayer.com/music/chocoborobovoice.html and click view new window.If that doesnt work click view current window! Ull like it. oh yeah also if u liked it and wanna hear more then post your question and ill show u more.

[Tsikuro]

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This is funny so watch it . go to http://www.flashplayer.com/music/chocoborobovoice.html and click view new window.If that doesnt work click view current window! Ull like it. oh yeah also if u liked it and wanna hear more then post your question and ill show u more.

What the fuck does this have to do with the thread? o_O;

But, I must say... at some point I thought that poem was sorta... geeky. Towards the end, though, it was moving. Sad. ; ;

[Lovy]

;-)

It was a long time since the last time I've been here, now I've got the connection to this site at last. First, I want to thank all guys who replied, really appreciate! :-) Well, in fact I'm a cheerful person, the "battery" for all my friends. But most of the time when I tried to write a poem (natural humbleness, I don't say "I wrote poems" ;-) )- it was sad. I've never lost a friend like that, but... I never could imagine how hard it'll be to loose an enemy, so the story's upside down. Not a foe, rival, but true enemy of mine died, the one who wished the death to me, and I felt the same. But when it happened... You can see in the mood of a poem- I felt so sorry.
Geeky- yes, soap opera cries- agree, from how I criticized it's also narrow in expressions, small errors, and in one verse- the stress is incorrect. This all I tried to compensate with emotionality and true feelings I put inside. Ah, what you wanted from a person who cannot pass the TOEFL test? ^^ If I knew English better- I could have done better, I'm working on that. Thank you once again, my fair critics and good luck to you! :-)

[Takemura-san]

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so touching geez this caan teach a man the errors of his ways. so many emotions :sigh: this has brought my soul to life. i can tell this came from your feelings Lovy. two words

Beautiful , Touching

[Gorgan]

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Poems are what move us all especailly good 1s good job lovvy. I was thinking that mabey love isnt true.Mabey god made up to keep us livving for a purpose everyone els has...... kinda like the feeling you give someone your heart ,they refuse....and you try to please them ...but this time they crushed it not caring 4 u... but we all not need believe it so we choose our own purpose...les of it I grow tire of depressing,and yeti want to hear it.

[Takemura-san]

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;sigh; too true gorgon i've been wandering most my life searching for my soul mate just to have my heart ripped an crushed Lovy my last gf rl an game died of cancer
;;;; i may be only 17 but this is what see told me the day before she left this plane ;sigh; i miss her now she said "guys like you are rare i love you baby goodbye manuel...." then she logged an i got a tell from a her sister that she had gone from this plane.... ;sigh; ;;;;